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How far can they push?
How long will I stand?
Until my heart turns to stone,
And it weighs down your hand?

I'm trapped inside this thing called life.

I'm up against the ledge,
Standing all alone.
Staring down the jagged ridge,
My fate with this unknown.

I'm trapped inside this thing called life.

I'll make my own destiny,
I'll choose my own end.
There's no one left to save me,
No one to call a friend?

I'm trapped inside this thing called life.

One deep breath,
I try to forget it all.
I feel the wind push against me,
And I fall.

I fall, and

Fall

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F

A

L

L

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And still there's no one to save me.

I'm trapped inside this thing called life...

No more.
another poem ^_^
... it is rather odd, though, isn't it?

entered it in :icondeltabeta:'s contest
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gollylagger Featured By Owner May 6, 2008
so very true, there's no one to save us from life.. that makes me feel rather hopeless, but lovely poem :)
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randomcutie Featured By Owner May 7, 2008
thank you so much ^_^
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thephantom357 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008
its ood but good nevertheless. I like the spacing at the end.
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randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008
thank you
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OceanEyedWolf Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
Sad...but very good :thumbsup:
I think we all go there at some point in our lives :heart:
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randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
yeah, thank you
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OceanEyedWolf Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
:hug:
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the-lovley-k-wilding Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
really good, i liked it
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
thanks ^_^
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Prosaic-Scriptor Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
No, it's very good. The repetition adds depth to the poetry. :heart:
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
aww, thanks ^_^
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Prosaic-Scriptor Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
np! lovely avatar, btw.
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
thanks again XD
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Prosaic-Scriptor Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem again! :heart:
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:iconquakingducky:
quakingducky Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
unusual, but i likey.
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
thankies :)
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VixRayne Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Odd, but yes good.
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
thanks ^_^
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RisingTwindragons Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
but good!
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
sankyu
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RisingTwindragons Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
ooo i luv how u spelled that!
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:iconrandomcutie:
randomcutie Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
lol, me too ^_^
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RisingTwindragons Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
*grabbes* my new word 2!
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